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    Hey guys. I'm working on this track but there's something missing. Let me know what you think. Thanks.

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    UPDATE: Third Draft (So Close)


    UPDATE: This is my second draft.


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    hey man , i'am not very advanced in production but hard working on it , i think the track is great

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    find the tune to be great as well.

    maybe the bass could need a little more variation. also the chopped up vocals could use some more variation. i also would either make the first main part shorter or add more of the elements used in the second main part as theyre real good.

    good job man. would love to hear some feedback on my latest tune also!
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    +1 on variation, what you got sounds great but I think you should mix it up a bit!
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    Thanks guys It's really hard to get something that sounds simple yet has movement to it. Im afraid to change it up too much so that it loses what I already have. It's really making me crazy

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    OK dude try adding some more perc at 01:57, you did it after the break but pulling the same loop for that long could be dangerous...

    Try adding a sample shaker on top of the hi hat (kick - hat+shaker - snare - hat+shaker-kick) or try an entire shaker loop

    You could also try changing up the brwwmmmmm bass you've layerer with the kick, instead of using the same note all the way through you could make it (listen to it at the same time)

    D... D- E..... E--- D.... D..... C...

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    Good ideas. I was thinking adding more percussion would be a good idea

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    Alright guys here's a new version. Let me know if you think it's better. Quite a few changes.


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    i like that version better. thing is, is would really put more work into the chopped vocals since they stay basicly the same the whole track and get somewhat annoying in 6 minutes. i really like them but they need more variation and or to go out and in more!
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    I'm not sure how much more I can vary it without it getting jumbled. Although, I agree there needs to be a break. Maybe during the breakdown/build up. I'll try it and let you guys know. Thanks for helping.

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