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[vinnyp]

https://soundcloud.com/cousinvinnych...ny-self-master


Latest track. Deep feel with a touch of Organs. Looking for some feedback. thanks.

[tilldrop]

The noise sweeps do not really sit in the mix. Auto-panning them is not ideal when there is not much going on since it's like moving your head in a tennis match: left-right-left-right, but without any content - just white noise. Try to at least make the focus more in the middle (like having the signal mono and some slightly auto-panned reverb or similar)

You should fix that glitch at 0:30. The clap there is way off. It sounds a bit like you want to be creative with just one hit. I'd highly suggest to rather make something genuine, reproduce what others have done. You'll learn how and why it works and what else could work and why some things dont. +1 Point for creativity -2 for it not working out ;-)

The baseline at 00:38 does not come in when exspected (wrong phase). Try sticking to a known song structure first. Pretty much same as above.

The noise sweep at 0:56 is the same, but this time it's much less distracting since there is more going on. Much better!

At about 1:20 the clap roll sets in. Try making it a bit more spicy. The sample is great so just leave out some claps here and there, go back and forth in "speed" (8th-16th-8th-32th) etc. It's not wrong to just google "snare roll pattern" here.

The very short voice sample is going on for 1minute 33 seconds. That's rather long I feel seeing how simple the sample is. Try mixing it up or go into the instrumental earlier.

The baseline at 1:33 is well done!

1:34 that one high tone is great. Detail is what makes a song enjoyable. Don't overdo it, but in general you can make more of this (not that tone - even though it comes again), but those details. Like percussion hits, that only come once in a full song. Or making things unique instead of repetitive.

Same sweep at 1:44 and 2:00. Switch things up a little here.

3:30 same thing about the clap roll.

The missing HH at 4:54 sounds like an ending, but then suddenly it comes back.


While I now looked for outstanding things and those usually are the mistakes I have to say that there is a lot of well done stuff here. The mix in general was pretty good. It was not the most professional I've ever heared, but in general it was well done. It seems like you had an eye/ear on frequencies of the sounds, nice filtered synthesithers etc. Especially it is not easy to use a man's voice in such songs since it will always colide with bassier sounds much more than a woman's voice. Your sounds dealt with it very well. All in all the song is a bit too repetitive for me, has some issues with drums and effects, but was done well in bassline and sound aspects.

I hope that you understand my intention and words. I don't mean to badmouth your music, I just want to point out where you could improve. Keep it up!

[vinnyp]

Thanks, I appreciate you giving my song a listen along with a solid legit response. This is exactly what i was looking for. Some real feedback. I felt the same way about the vocal but couldn't find anything else that fit. I'm going to go over the track again and clean it up a little bit here and there. Thanks again for the feedback tilldrop. Your feedback goes a long way.